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30 Memorable Last Lines

“30 Memorable Last Lines” by Joan Y. Edwards

Copyright 2018 Joan Y. Edwards
As writers you’ve heard many times, “Have a good hook. Have an opening that hooks the reader into staying for the whole show. In other words, have an opener that gets readers to keep reading your book until the very end.


Today I’d like to focus on the last words of your book, the message you want to resonate in the hearts of your readers for a really long time. The one you want them to keep hearing over and over. I’ve put the spotlight on the last lines of books and a few movies. Film makers choose many books to make into movies.


You want your readers to define the closing a good one…a satisfactory conclusion. And even more than that, you want the last words of your book to resonate in the ears and hearts of your readers for their lifetime. You want them to be memorable. They will be memorable if they are meaningful to your readers.


I found many links online to what others believe are the most memorable last lines of books and movies. I shared them in the resources section below.


It seems difficult to fathom anyone being able to read every book or to see all movies. However, if you’re like me, you love to read and you love to watch good movies. You read the books or watch the movies that meet a need of yours. You have your opinions about the books you’ve read or movies you’ve seen. 


I believe that like the beginning of books, the closing of books can also hook readers. I listed stories I’ve read or would like to read because of the impact, the closing had on me.  Some are serious and others are humorous, but all are meaningful to me. These closing lines hooked me. 


Please share your favorite last lines of books or movies with me.


30 Memorable Last Lines

  1. “The creatures outside looked from pig to man, and from man to pig, and from pig to man again; but already it was impossible to say which was which.” –George Orwell, Animal Farm (1945)
  2. “It was a fine cry—loud and long—but it had no bottom and it had no top, just circles and circles of sorrow.” –Toni Morrison, Sula (1973)
  3. “But I reckon I got to light out for the Territory ahead of the rest, because Aunt Sally she’s going to adopt me and civilize me and I can’t stand it. I been there before.”  –Mark Twain, The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn (1885)
  4. “Maybe I will go to Paris. Who knows? But I’ll sure as hell never go back to Texas again.” –James Crumley, The Final Country (2001)
  5. “Lastly, she pictured to herself how this same little sister of hers would, in the after-time, be herself a grown woman; and how she would keep, through all her riper years, the simple and loving heart of her childhood; and how she would gather about her other little children, and make their eyes bright and eager with many a strange tale, perhaps even with the dream of Wonderland of long ago; and how she would feel with all their simple sorrows, and find a pleasure in all their simple joys, remembering her own child-life, and the happy summer days. –Lewis Carroll, Alice’s Adventures in Wonderland (1865)
  6. “P.S. Sorry I forgot to give you the mayonnaise.”
    –Richard Brautigan, Trout Fishing in America (1967)
  7. “Columbus too thought he was a flop, probably, when they sent him back in chains. Which didn’t prove there was no America.” –Saul Bellow, The Adventures of Augie March (1953)
  8. “We shall never be again as we were!” –Henry James, The Wings of the Dove (1902)
  9. “Tell me how free I am.” –Richard Powers, Prisoner’s Dilemma (1988)
  10. “But wherever they go, and whatever happens to them on the way, in that enchanted place on the top of the Forest, a little boy and his Bear will always be playing.” – A. A. Milne, The House at Pooh Corner (1928)
  11. “Don’t ever tell anybody anything. If you do, you start missing everybody.” – J.D. Salinger, The Catcher in the Rye (1951)
  12. I taker her hand, squeezing it tightly, and we walk on. -Monika Schröder  My Brothers Shadow (2011)
  13. “But I knew that Catherine had kissed me because she trusted me, and that made me happy then but now I am sad because by the time my eyes close each night I suspect that as usual I have been fooling myself, that she, too, is in her grave.” –William T. Vollmann, You Bright and Risen Angels (1987)
  14. “Vaya con Dios, my darklin’, and remember: vote early and vote often, don’t take any wooden nickels, and”—by now I was rolling about helplessly on the spare room floor, scrunched up around my throbbing pain and bawling like a baby— “always leave ’em laughin’ as you say good-bye!” –Robert Coover, The Public Burning (1977)
  15. “I never saw any of them again—except the cops. No way has yet been invented to say goodbye to them. –Raymond Chandler, The Long Goodbye (1953)
  16. “He heard the ring of steel against steel as a far door clanged shut. –Richard Wright, Native Son (1940)
  17. “I ran with the wind blowing in my face, and a smile as wide as the valley of Panjsher on my lips. I ran.” – Khaled Hosseini, The Kite Runner (2003)
  18. Jerry: “But don’t you understand, Osgood? Oh… I’m a man!”
    Osgood Fielding: “Well, nobody’s perfect.” – Some Like It Hot Film adapted by director Billy Wilder and comedy writer, I.A.L. Diamond from Fanfare of Love, a story by Michael Logan.
  19. “I’m so glad to be at home again” – L. Frank Baum, The Wonderful Wizard of Oz (1900)
  20. Jim: “Where you headed, cowboy?”
    Bart: “Nowhere special.”
    Jim: “Nowhere special? I always wanted to go there.”
    Bart: “Come on.” -Mel Brooks, Andrew Bergman, Richard Pryor, Norman Steinberg, and Al Uger, and was based on Andrew Bergman’s story and draft, Blazing Saddles.
  21. “But the miracle of it all is, when push comes to shove, we can be just as tough as hickory. It mostly burns at first. After a while it starts to feel better.” -Joyce Moyer Hostetter,  Blue
  22. E.T.: “I’ll be right here.” – Steven Spielberg, E.T. the Extraterrestrial
  23. Louis: “Looking good, Billy Ray!”
    Billy Ray: “Feeling good, Louis!” – 
    Timothy HarrisHerschel Weingrod,  Trading Places
  24. “But the sky was bright, and he somehow felt he was headed in the right direction.” – E.B. White, Stuart Little (1934)
  25. “Tomorrow, I’ll think of some way to get him back. After all, tomorrow is another day.” – Margaret Mitchell, Gone With The Wind (1936)
  26. “And so, as Tiny Tim observed, God bless Us, Every One!” – Charles Dickens, A Christmas Carol (1843)
  27. “A LAST NOTE FROM YOUR NARRATOR. I am haunted by humans.”- Markus Zusak, The Book Thief (2006)
  28. “The scar had not pained Harry for nineteen years. All was well.” –  J.K. Rowling, Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows. 
  29. “But that is the beginning of a new story—the story of the gradual renewal of a man, the story of his gradual regeneration, of his passing from one world into another, of his initiation into a new unknown life. That might be the subject of a new story, but our present story is ended.” –Fyodor Dostoyevsky, Crime and Punishment (1866; trans. Constance Garnett)
  30. “From here on in I rag nobody.” –Mark Harris, Bang the Drum Slowly (1956)



Will Your Query Letter Sell Your Manuscript?

Query image Copyright © 2013 Joan Y. Edwards
Query image Copyright © 2013 Joan Y. Edwards

“Will Your Query Letter Sell Your Manuscript?” by Joan Y. Edwards

Does your query letter have what It takes? Does it contain all the components of a good query letter? Does it have all the necessary ingredients? Will your query letter sell your manuscript? Check it out for all the components listed below:

A great query letter:

  1. Contains a great selling pitch that leaves the agent or publisher so moved by the story that they can’t wait to see your full manuscript.
  2. Convinces an editor or agent that they are the right publisher or agent for this book.
  3. Compares 1-3 books published by this publisher or represented by this agent.
  4. Explains why you are the best person to write this story and gives your credentials.
  5. Thanks the editor or agent for considering your work.
  6. Asks the question: “May I send you my manuscript?”
  7. Tells when you expect to hear from them.
  8. Gives name, address, city, state, zip code, phone number, email, websites, and blogs,
  9. Includes a self-addressed stamped envelope (SASE) when the guidelines ask for one.
  10. Follows the guidelines of the editor or agent.

Here’s my article: “Components of a Good Query Letter.” You might enjoy it: https://joanyedwards.wordpress.com/2011/04/17/components-of-a-good-query-letter/

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Interview with Vivian Zabel and 4RV Publishing

Vivian Zabel, President of 4RV Publishing with Prairie Dog Cowboy
Vivian Zabel, President of 4RV Publishing.

“Interview with Vivian Zabel, President of 4RV Publishing” by Joan Y. Edwards

Today I welcome Vivian Zabel, President of 4RV Publishing, LLC.

In October 2010, I did an online chat pitch for “Joan’s Elder Care Guide” with Vivian at the Muse Online Writers Conference. I was impressed by the quality of 4RV’s books and that they worked one-on-one with authors and illustrators. I was excited when she told me, “It sounds promising. Send me a proposal and the first three chapters.” In April 4RV Publishing sent me a contract to publish it with a release date of June 2015. I am still dancing on the roof.

Thank you, Vivian for allowing me to interview you and 4RV Publishing on my blog. Let us begin:

4RV Publishing Logo

1. How did 4RV Publishing get started? What is the symbolic meaning of the name? How did you and Aidana WillowRaven, VP of Operations, meet? Is she a partner?

I saw a need to fill the gap between vanity and self-publishing and the major publishing houses.

4RV represents my family: Robert (my husband), Rene (our daughter), Robert Jr. (our son), and Randy (our son) – the four Rs – and me, the one V.

Aidana and I met online. Actually we met when she wanted 4RV to accept a manuscript for someone she knew. No, she’s not a partner, but the company couldn’t manage without her.

2. What are the goals of 4RV Publishing?

The goal of 4RV publishing is to produce quality books from the best authors we can find and with the best illustrations and cover art around.

We expect thorough and complete editing so that as few errors and the best writing can be the result.

3. What was the first book you published?

I believe Trockle was our first picture book, and our only foray into hardback picture books. The logistics of hardback picture books is another story.

I’m not sure which was our first young adult or adult book, but it may have been my book The Base Stealers Club, a YA mystery. A side note: All my works have to go through the submissions process, too, anonymously. I have been rejected by a 4RV acquisition editor.

4. What has been the best-selling book? Why?

So far, Dogsled Dreams by Terry Lynn Johnson has sold the most copies, mainly because of the author’s participation in dog sledding and her promotions. Of course it’s a well written book. Terry and her editor worked together to make it the best it could be.

5. What are the three (or more) major problems of being a small traditional publisher? How have you overcome them? What are your strategies for success?

The Consumer Product Safety Act’s directive to have all products for children under 13 tested by a third party testing site nearly destroyed us, and we’ve never quite recovered, even though now books are exempted. Of course, all materials used to make books are tested for lead. How the government thought putting materials without lead together would create lead, I have no idea.

So, money is a major problem. Also costs: printing, fees, shipping, returned books, and other expenses. Un-cooperating authors and/or illustrators cause headaches, too, as do design problems that aren’t caught.

The money factor has no solution. At least the company is now paying its own way, no profit yet, but I’m not having to bankroll the company except for expenses for festivals and such.

Authors who won’t work with editors or fight all the way can be released, and have been. It’s still a headache dealing with them. Illustrators who won’t give progress reports or who drop a project after agreeing to finish leave us dangling. No solution for that problem unless they expect a good reference. Design problems mean more expenses to redo a project. Of course some of those problems are a result of authors not doing a good review of the proofs sent them.

My strategy for success is to continue to put out the best books possible, with the help of some of the best authors, editors, illustrators, and staff around.

6. What are three advantages of being a small traditional publisher?

  • We get to work one on one with authors and illustrators and staff.
  • We can better control the quality of our books.
  • We can watch others succeed.

7. What has given you the greatest feeling of satisfaction and pride?

  •  Discovering people who have thoroughly enjoyed any of our books.

8. What are your current submission guidelines?

Our submission guidelines can be found at 4RV Publishing Submission Guidelines

We suggest anyone interested follow them carefully.

9. What kind of books are you looking for? Children? Adults?

We are scheduled with children’s books through 2015, but we want more well-written young adult, more mysteries, more science fiction, more fantasy, more nonfiction.

 10. What kind of books do you reject? (subjects, quality)

We do not accept anything with graphic or detailed sex or violence. I don’t want my company to put out anything that would cause me to be embarrassed if one of my grandchildren or great-grandchildren picked it up.

11. What distribution do you have for your books?

We pay for Ingram to handle our books. It’s the largest distributor in the world. We also have a website and an online bookstore for our books.

12. How does a book get in a book store?

Any bookstore can obtain any 4RV book through Ingram or directly from 4RV.

Recommendations and requests from customers let stores know to carry books, too.

13. When a big book store like Borders closes, do they return the books, or do you have to take them as a loss?

 Actually, both. Yes, the books are returned, but the company has to pay full retail for the books, therefore double paying for some aspects and paying more than the returning store did. We get the books back (or we can choose for the books to be destroyed and not returned), but no matter what we take a loss.

14. What do you do to market your books? I love the trailers you do for your books. They are high quality.

I’m glad you like the trailers, but several people create them: sometimes the author or illustrator, sometimes one of our designers.

We have our books at book festivals. We promote online. We have them distributed through Ingram. We send out catalogs to libraries and bookstores. We expect our authors and illustrators to promote their books: some do, some don’t. The ones who do, help their book sales.

15. What do you expect your authors to do to promote their books?

Whatever it takes. They can have readings, presentations, visits to schools and libraries, promotion on the Internet, attend festivals and conferences with their books, and seek reviews for their books.

16. How is 4RV Publishing meeting the customer demand for eBooks?

We’re beginning to format some of our books for ebooks, however we haven’t seen any of that so called “demand.”

Formatting for ebooks is as much work as formatting for print, and we can’t use one format for the other. We have to do two completely different setups.

17. Where can people buy 4RV Publishing books?

4RV books can be bought through a physical bookstore or online bookstore, as well as through the 4RV online bookstore/catalog: http://4rvpublishingcatalog.com. Titles are listed with the imprints:

Look for books according to the last name of the author at http://www.4rvpublishingcatalog.com/contents.php


18. What are your three suggestions for writers who wish to be published?

  •  Know your craft and have a well-written manuscript. Find at least one person to edit who knows what is required for publication. Follow suggestions, revise, rewrite. Realize that there is no magical number of edits or revisions.
  • Research publishers to find one that accepts your genre. Never think your work is so great that any publisher will make an exception.
  • Follow the publisher’s submission guidelines exactly. If the company doesn’t have guidelines online, request a copy of the guidelines.

19. What are three suggestions for illustrators who wish to receive a contract to illustrate a cover or picture book?

Most companies have submission guidelines for illustrators, too. 4RV does, and we ask people to follow them.

Our guidelines for designers and illustrators can be found at: 4RV Publishing Submission Guidelines for Illustrators

20. How do you know when a book is right for you to publish? What are three signs that a book is right for you?

  • he manuscript is extremely well-written.
  • The manuscript is interesting from the first few sentences.
  • The writer is anxious to follow suggestions to make it even better.

Thank you again, Vivian for allowing me to interview you and 4RV Publishing on my blog and for believing in me and “Joan’s Elder Care Guide.”

To learn more about Vivian Zabel, read the delightful interview on Holly Jahangiri’s The Next Goal blog from October 21, 2011: http://thenextgoal.com/2011/10/interview-with-author-and-publisher-vivian-zabel/.

4RV Publishing Book Storehttp://4rvpublishingcatalog.com

My book,  Joan’s Elder Care Guide: Empowering You and Your Elder to Survive is now available from 4RV Publishing: Thank you, Vivian Zabel for believing in me.

Thank you for reading about Vivian Zabel and 4RV Publishing. I hope the information inspires you to take a step forward to make your publication dreams come true.I’d love to hear from you. Click on comment and scroll down to the bottom of the page.


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What Is Your Story’s Premise? Editors Want to Know

Editors ask: What is your story about? They want to know your emotional premise, your simple three to six word premise

Before you write your story, while you are writing your story, or after your story is finished you must know what your premise is. You must know what your story is about. You must know what it is you prove with the characters and the situations in your story. Are you proving that poverty plus distrust leads to crime? Are you proving that faith versus fear leads to success? Are you proving that ambition plus jealousy leads to failure?

Bill Johnson said a good story revolves around human needs in his article: Premise — Foundation of Storytelling (2000) http://www.storyispromise.com/wpremise.htm

William Foster-Harris says premise is a solved illustration of a problem of moral arithmetic, such as pride + love = happiness in his book: The Basic Formulas of Fiction (1944).

According to James N. Frey, author of How to Write Damn Good Novel,  “to find your premise, you start with a character or a situation, give the protagonist a dilemma, and then say what if such and such happened.” In his book, The Key, Frey adds that premise has to have character, conflict, conclusion, and conviction of the author.

James N. Frey, Emily McKay, and Debra Dixon agree that every character in your story must have a (GMC) goal, motivation, and conflict. However, the goal, motivation, and conflict of your protagonist is the one upon which the proof of your story’s premise should be based.

A premise is what you, the author, set out to prove in your story. With your premise, you are saying to your readers, given these characters and this situation, human nature is such that it will end up this way. It is a very short emotional summary of your story that says this human emotion, quality, or condition struggling against an extremely negative emotion, quality, or human condition leads to a final changed human condition at the end of your story. It doesn’t always have to happen that way in real life. However, it’s that way in your story.

Your premise is a message for your readers that when two particular human emotions, qualities, or conditions are pitted together, you come up with a concluding emotion, quality, or condition.

The same premise can be used for different stories. A premise is universal.

Joan’s Emotional Premises for Movies

Blind Side (2009) Premise: trust plus compassion leads to family.

Saying, proverb, cliche: One person can make a difference.


Love Story (1970) Premise: courage versus illness leads to unselfish love

Saying: Perfect love means unselfishness.


Confessions of a Shopaholic (2009) Premise: addiction plus respect leads to love.

Saying: Practice What You Preach


Fatal Attraction (1987) Premise: love versus obsessive jealousy leads to death

Saying: What Goes Around, Comes Around

Liar Liar (1997) Premise: lies plus love leads to divorce; truth plus forgiveness leads to reunification

Saying: Lies Catch Up with You in the End

Make your main character with one of these, struggle for or against one of these, and end up with one of these emotions, traits, vices, virtues, qualities, or conditions of his/her body, soul, and mind.

Emotions, Traits, Vices, Virtues, Qualities, and/or Conditions of the Body, Soul, or Mind

abundance, acceptance, accusation, addiction, admiration, affection, alienation, ambition, anger, annihilation, anxiety, apathy, approval, attention, authority, awareness, awe, beauty, belief, belonging, betrayal, blame, brutality, challenge, chaos, cheerfulness, choices, coming of age, competition, compassion, commitment, confidence, contempt, cooperation, corruption, courage, cowardice, creativity, crime, curiosity, death, debt, deception, dedication, desire, despair, destitution, destruction, dignity, disillusionment, disapproval, disaster, disbelief, discomfort, disgust, dishonesty, disrespect, distress, distrust, divorce, doubt, dream, education, enlightenment, enthusiasm, envy, equality, experience, etiquette, evil, excitement, failure, faith, faithfulness, fate, fear, forbidden, forgiveness, freedom, friendship, fun, fury, future, gain, generosity, genius, good, gratitude, greed, grief, guilt, handicap, happiness, hatred, honesty, honor, hope, humility, humor, hunger, identity, independence, indignation, individuality, initiation, injustice, innocence, insanity, intelligence, interest, isolation, jealousy, joy, justice, judgment, kindness, knowledge, lack, legal, lies, life, loneliness, loyalty, marriage, materialism, money, morality, murder, nature, nobility, order, obsession, oppression, pain, panic, passion, past, patience, peace, pity, power, peace, persecution, perseverance, pleasure, possibilities, poverty, principles, prejudice, pride, problems, protection, punishment, rage, rebelling, rebirth, redemption, rejection, relationship, religion, respect, responsibility, revenge, reverence, reward, romance, ruin, rules, sacrifice, sadness, satisfaction, security, selfishness, self-doubt, sex,  shame, shelter, sickness, sinfulness, sorrow, spirit, starvation, stinginess, stubborn, success, suffering, suicide, surprise, survival, talent, taxes, tenderness, terror, thankfulness, thirst, time, tragedy, trapped, triumph, trust, truth, understanding, unfairness, ungratefulness, valor, vengeance, violence, vulnerability, war, wisdom, wealth, wonder, work, and wrongdoing.

Use the Practice Chart below and put what you think would happen with the two traits I’ve chosen. Make your own chart listing the premise for each of the stories you have written. Write a premise for ten of your favorite movies. Write a premise for ten of your favorite novels.

Joan’s Practice Chart for Writing a Premise

Your Character with what trait?

+ Dilemma Conflict Struggle

Has to Fight Against What Trait?

Leads to What Result?

Extreme Positive or Negative  Emotion, Quality, or Condition Conflict with, struggle against or fight for powerful, emotion, quality, or condition Leads to Different Extreme Positive or Negative Emotion, Quality or Condition
1. extreme love extreme disgust leads to what?
2. extreme respect extreme fear leads to what?
3. extreme peace extreme hate leads to what?
4. extreme perseverance extreme greed leads to what?
5. extreme loyalty extreme envy leads to what?
6. extreme curiosity extreme cowardice leads to what?
7. extreme humility extreme grief leads to what?
8. extreme courage extreme lust leads to what?
9. extreme faith extreme suffering leads to what?
10. extreme hope extreme hunger leads to what?

I have heard people call this a theme, rather than a premise. Regardless, you have to have it, you have to know it, you have to believe it 100%. After you have your premise, you can write your pitch and the events of your story from the beginning, middle, and the end. Your premise will be proved by your story. Universal emotions and conditions that are understood by all human beings is transferred to your reader, and you will have a best seller.

Books That Discuss Premise

Art Of Dramatic Writing (1946,1960) by Lajos Egri free download of Chapter 1 http://www.writerswrite.com/fiction/egri.htm

How to Write a Damn Good Novel (1987) by James N. Frey http://www.amazon.com/Write-Damn-Novel-Step—Step/dp/0312010443

How to Write a Damn Good Novel, II (1994) by James N. Frey http://www.amazon.com/How-Write-Damn-Good-Novel/dp/0312104782

How to Write a Damn Good Mystery (2004) by James N. Frey http://www.amazon.com/Key-Write-Fiction-Using-Power/dp/0312300522

Goal, Motivation, and Conflict by Debra Dixon http://www.amazon.com/Goal-Motivation-Conflict-Building-Fiction/dp/0965437108

The Key: How to Write a Damn Good Fiction Using the Power of Myth (2000) by James N. Frey http://www.amazon.com/Key-Write-Fiction-Using-Power/dp/0312300522

Online Articles That Discuss Premise

Basics of Screenwriting, Session I, one of the contributors is Amy Dunkleberger


Definition of Premises http://www.dictionary30.com/meaning/Premises

Everything I Ever Needed to Know about Writing by Emily McKay http://emilymckay.com/for-writers/everything-i-ever-needed-to-know/

Premise–Foundation of Storytelling (2000) by Bill Johnson:  http://www.storyispromise.com/wpremise.htm

Story Premise (1998) by Kim Kay: http://www.suite101.com/article.cfm/novel_writing/12453

Start with a Solid Premise, ScribblePlay.com: http://scribbleplay.com/start-with-a-solid-premise/

Theme and Premise by Jeanne Vincent: http://www.jeannevincent.com/theme-and-premise-whats-the-difference/

Theme vs. Premise by Joel Haber http://funjoel.blogspot.com/2005/09/theme-vs-premise.html

Understanding Theme and Premise by Susan J. Letham http://www.anthologiesonline.com/Articles/theme_and_premise.htm

Online Articles That Discuss Emotions and Human Needs

1.      Fundamental Human Needs http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fundamental_human_needs.

2.      What Are the Universal Themes http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20081022125536AAzRGHD

3.      List of feeling words: http://www.eqi.org/fw.htm

4.      List of negative feeling words: http://www.eqi.org/cnfs.htm

5.      List of general emotions: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_emotions

6.      Basic Emotions by ChangingMinds.org http://changingminds.org/explanations/emotions/basic%20emotions.htm

7.      Robert Plutchik’s Wheel of Emotions

8.      Robert Plutchik’s Eight Primary Emotions and How to Use Them, Part 1 and Part 2 by Daniel Benjamin Smith http://dragonscanbebeaten.wordpress.com/2010/06/04/plutchiks-eight-primary-emotions-and-how-to-use-them-part-1/ and  http://dragonscanbebeaten.wordpress.com/2010/06/04/plutchiks-eight-primary-emotions-and-how-to-use-them-part-2-of-2/

9.      Nine Emotions from Sedona Method by Hale Dwoskin http://www.thefreelibrary.com/Sedona+Method+Emotions+What+Are+the+Sedona+Method+Emotions%3F-a01073854886

10.  Nine States of Emotional Empowerment by Swati Chopra

11.  Paul Ekman’s Big Six Emotions: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Paul_Ekman

12.  Character Helps for Writing from SFF.Net, Julie West http://www.sff.net/people/julia.west/CALLIHOO/dtbb/emotions.htm

13.  Character Helps for Writing with Intense Feelings from SFF.Net, Julie West http://www.sff.net/people/julia.west/CALLIHOO/dtbb/feelings.htm

14.  Feelings Clip Art: http://www.clipartguide.com/_search_terms/feelings.html

15.  Great pictures matched with emotions: http://www.feelingfacescards.com/

16.  Good description and pictures of emotions: http://www.face-and-emotion.com/dataface/emotion/expression.jsp

17.  Lists of emotions: http://simple.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_emotions

To those of you who are reading this. Thank you. I am honored. I hope my explanation of premise to help you latch onto that and make your stories stronger, more meaningful, and highly  marketable. A story with no premise has no meaning and will not be sold. If you want to read more about premise, choose one of the books or online articles listed above.  James N. Frey gave me the best explanation.  I appreciate James N. Frey’s reading over this article for my blog to make sure I didn’t lead you astray.  I appreciate his allowing me to review his books on my blog.

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Joan Y. Edwards




Help Celebrate PubSub3rdFri’s First Birthday – Submit on Friday, February 18, 2011

PubSub3rdFri Participant

Dear Pub Subbers,

Happy Birthday, PubSub3rdFri! Happy Birthday to you! Happy Birthday to you. Happy Birthday, Pub Sub, Happy Birthday to you.
The first official Pub Sub day was February 15, 2010. We’re going to have a great celebration on Friday, February 18, 2011.  As a Valentine’s Day present to yourself, I would like for you to join me in submitting a query, manuscript, or proposal on that day (or any day during February).  You can count it as a submission if you enter a writing contest or an illustrator contest. If you submit your work during February, read the directions at the end of this blog post to have a chance to receive a FREE CRITIQUE by me.

I hope you’ll join us in Pub Sub 3rd Fri. Our goal commitment is to submit an article, poem, puzzle, devotion, illustration, short story, picture book, chapter book, middle grade novel, young adult novel, adult novel, play, song, or movie to a publisher on the third Friday of each month for a whole year. Of course, you can submit your work to more than one publisher a month. Yes, indeed, you can submit to more than one agent a month. Honoring your dreams by submitting a manuscript this month is only to get you started. I hope that once you get started, you’ll be submitting as a habit. I hope that your belief in yourself will grow and branch out to all aspects of your life and will indeed help you reach your goal of getting published. I know for sure that publishers do not come searching the drawers where your manuscripts are hidden in your home. You have to let them know about your writing treasures. Take action. Submit to publishers and/or agents.

It is very important in life to take time to do what is important to you.  By honoring yourself by working on your writing, you are being a good example to your family that each person should take time to do what is vitally important to them.  Be creative. You can do it. You can find 15 minutes for you each day.  There are different parts to writing:  1. Experience life and watch people. 2. Read. 3. Write down ideas that intrigue you. 4. Write about the ideas that won’t let you go…the what ifs. Drop the excuses. It’s just as easy to say the words, “I have the time,” as it is to say, “I don’t have the time.” One empowers you and the other stops you in your tracks. So you don’t do it every month, but you do it more than you ever have in the past. Hurray for you! Celebrate! Even if it’s with a cup of coffee. Celebrate your submissions. Celebrate you…there’s only one of you.

Here are steps for each week to get you ready to submit your work to a publisher or agent: say, “I can do it.” Let me hear you shout, “Yes, yes. I can do it. I have the power to do it. I CAN DO IT.”

Besides a manuscript or article, below are the resources you need to accomplish your Pub Sub 3rd Fri goal:

Steps for Week One Smile, Giggle, Laugh . See the humor.
1. Read this book or a similar one, or search online publisher/agent websites for current guidelines.

Jeff Herman’s Guide to Book Publishers, Editors, and Literary Agents 2011: Who They Are! What They Want! How to Win Them Over! by Jeff Herman


2 Choose three publishers/agents to submit a manuscript/query letter/illustration.

a. Read the guidelines of all three publishers/agents.

b. Select the publisher/agent to use this month.

c. Print out a copy of the publisher’s guidelines and save it in your submissions folder.

3. Fine tune your manuscript.

a. Use spell and grammar check with your manuscript.

b. Look for four errors in your manuscript. Read my blog for common errors you might miss unless you search for them: https://joanyedwards.wordpress.com/2010/09/27/look-for-four-writing-errors-when-you-revise/

c. If you’ve been to a writing conference, revise three places in your manuscript using a skill or technique taught that you think will improve it.

d. Here are fourteen books that may help you with your writing skills. They are listed in alphabetical order according to author’s first name. If you click on the title, it’ll take you to Amazon.com. Check out the book from your local library for free or buy it at a book store (local or online). I’ve read all of these books. They each contain excellent advice and tips for beginning and improving your story. Little by little the information and skills soak into your mind. Your skills and knowledge improve. You’ll be able to tell when you’re critiquing someone’s work or reading your favorite book. You’ll say to yourself, “AHA. That’s how to do it.” Your writing gets better. Your critiquing improves. You move one step closer to publication. Even published writers continue to learn more about the craft of writing by reading.

1. Darcy Pattison: Novel Metamorphosis

2. Donald Maass: The Fire in Fiction

3. Donald Maass: Writing the Breakout Novel

4. Donald Maass: Writing the Breakout Novel Workbook

5. James N. Frey How to Write a Damn Good Novel

6. James N. Frey How to Write a Damn Good Novel, II

7. James N. Frey How to Write a Damn Good Mystery

8. James N. Frey The Key: How to Write Damn Good Fiction Using the Power of Myth

9. Karl Iglesias: Writing for Emotional Impact

10. Margaret Lucke: Schaum’s Quick Guide to Writing Great Short Stories

11. Noah Lukeman: The First Five Pages

12. Jordan E. Rosenfeld: Make a Scene

13. Katharine Sands: Making the Perfect Pitch

14. Remni Browne and Dave King: Self-Editing for Fiction Writers

Week Two Steps for Pub Sub 3rd Fri Smile, Giggle, Laugh .

1. Let your manuscript sit a week in an incubator while you do your query or cover letter, resume, and proposal.

2. If the guidelines say to write a query letter, then write your query letter.

3. If you’re submitting a manuscript or article, write a cover letter to accompany it.

a. Include a strong pitch for your manuscript in your cover letter. A pitch is a 25 word eye-catching, heart-trapping summary of your book or article to hook the attention of the reader, agent, and/or editor. Refer to my blog for more information about writing your pitch: https://joanyedwards.wordpress.com/2010/07/29/how-to-entice-an-editoragent-with-a-pitch-logline.

b. In your cover letter, mention one book, article, or illustration similar to yours and how yours hooks readers and attracts them to it. Each time you write a cover letter, you will improve.

c. If you’re a member of SCBWI, mention that fact in your cover letter. SCBWI has a great reputation with publishers.

d. If this is an exclusive submission, write that in your cover letter. “This is an exclusive submission for three months. On (date 3 months from your submission) I am submitting it to other publishers.” For exclusive submission with an agent, you can limit the time to two months or six weeks. Their guidelines might give you an idea of how much time they usually take. I think giving them a time, keeps you from wondering and gives them reason to respect your choice.

4. Write your resume.

a. Include your snail mail address, phone number, email address, website, blog.

b. List all memberships in professional organizations.

c. Include all of your publishing credits.

5. If needed, write your proposal.

Steps for Week Three Smile, Giggle, Laugh:

1. Read out loud a printed out (hard copy) of your manuscript. Make all necessary changes.

2. Print out your manuscript again. Read it aloud, again. Then read it from the bottom to the top, and from right to left. This will help you notice more errors that your might not notice in other ways.

3. If you see errors, correct them.

4. Print out the GO FOR IT copy of manuscript, cover letter, resume, and/or proposal.

5. Put one copy of manuscript, cover letter, resume, and/or proposal in 9×12 envelope

6. Print out and save another copy of manuscript, cover letter, resume, and/or proposal in a folder called “Submitted Manuscripts.”

7. Make sure you put your snail mail address, phone number, email address, website, and blog on your cover letter, proposal, query, and/or manuscript. If it’s an email submission, follow the publisher/editor/agent guidelines about attachments. Many publishers do not accept attachments. Follow their guidelines.

8. Print out label for 9×12 inch envelope – use the mailing address in publisher’s guidelines. If it is an exclusive submission, mark it as such on the outside of the envelope.

9. Enclose a stamped self-addressed envelope, if the guidelines ask for one.

10. Put sufficient postage on the envelope.

11. Leave the envelope with all the items inside over night (24 hours is good).

Pub Sub 3rd Friday Laugh, Smile, Laugh
12. Check your manuscript, cover letter, proposal, and resume Friday morning.

13. Put addressed, stamped envelope with your PUB SUB in a mailbox or email. Say a prayer. Ask God to bless this submission. Say to yourself: I allow myself to receive a positive response, such as, “Yes, I’d like to publish this manuscript.”

Each time you submit, you will get better and better. In case you’re not ready on the third Friday of this month, go to my website and print out a rain check: http://www.joanyedwards.com/pubsub3rdfri.htm.

See my other Pub Sub 3rd Fri blog posts for more information: https://joanyedwards.wordpress.com/category/writing/pub-sub-3rd-fri.

To those of you who are reading this. Thank you. I am honored. Good luck in publishing your work.  For more encouragement to submit your work, read Linda Andersen Is Proof That PubSub3rdFri Works. Let me know if Pub Sub 3rd Fri helps you get published. I’d love to hear from you. Feel free to share a link to my blog with others.

Never Give Up!
Joan Y. Edwards

Copyright © 2011 Joan Y. Edwards.


Two Books to Read and Study: Sands’ Making the Perfect Pitch and Herman’s Guide

While I was on vacation, I read two books that I highly recommend that you read and study:

1. Making the Perfect Pitch: How to Catch a Literary Agent’s Eye by Katharine Sands


It gives advice and information in 40 different chapters from the point of view of different agents about agenting, pitches, query letters, proposals.

From reading this, I discovered four ideas that spoke to me.

1). Jane Dystel will keep trying 20 times or more to get your work published. Here is a link to her agency:  http://www.dystel.com/

2). Sheree Bykofsky says don’t make changes you don’t 100% agree with. Here is a link to her agency: http://www.shereebee.com/

3). Joseph Regal says if you don’t feel completely comfortable with every page and part of your story, go back and rework it. Here is a link to his site: http://www.regal-literary.com/About.html

4). Michael Larsen says an outline is one line for each page of your story. Here is a link to his site: http://www.larsen-pomada.com/lp/index.cfm

2. Jeff Herman’s Guide to Book Publishers, Editors, and Literary Agents 2011: Who They Are! What They Want! How to Win Them Over! by Jeff Herman


Free chapter from Jeff Herman’s website: http://www.jeffherman.com/articles/when-nothing-happens/

Jeff Herman’s book gives you book publishers, names of their editors, and literary agents. He gives you the big conglomerates, independent book publishers, and university presses. For each category he gives you titles they have published, what they are looking for, what they’re not looking for, links to websites, guidelines, and a history of the publishers and agents.  It lists whether the publisher accepts unsolicited submissions and indicates those who communicate only with agents.

After you read each section, it would be good to make a list of the agents and publishers who are a good match for you and your book(s). I wrote them down in a notebook. I plan to put the first three in each category in my computer and list them in order of how I plan to contact them for which story that I’ve written.  Put a link to their website and submission guidelines. Then check to see if the guidelines have changed.  Follow a publisher or agent’s latest guidelines. If you don’t follow the guidelines, you are choosing to be overlooked. If you don’t read and follow the guidelines, you are not ready for publication.

Herman’s book has icons to denote different genres: cross-religious, heart-romance, school bus-children, and others for adult, poetry, fantasy, etc. I really appreciated that because I was searching for publishers of religious work, children, and adults.

The book is very thick – probably more than 2 inches. It has over 1,000 pages. The font size is great. I didn’t have to get a magnifying glass to read it.

It also lists many resources at the back. It gives you a broad picture of how authors, agents, and publishers work together. It has the keys to publication. I plan to keep it close to my computer.

Thanks for reading my blog. I hope  reading my blog inspires you to Never Give Up on yourself or your writing.

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Five Ways to Cut the Number of Words in Your Manuscript

Dear Readers,

How do you react when an editor says:  “Cut this manuscript. It’s too long?”

The first thoughts that go through your head might be: “No. I need all those words. I thought up every single one of them. They are my precious babies.”

It may be hard for you, as an author, to let go of the words  you fought many hours to create and get down on paper. However, it is in revising that you transform your good writing into a masterpiece. When you realize this, you hesitate only a moment and ask, “Can you give me ways to cut it down? How do I choose which words to eliminate?”  Eliminate superfluous words that don’t carry the plot, character and emotional theme of the story forward.

In his “3 Ways to Cut Your Final Draft Down to Size,” James Vektor says, “With every word you put on the page, with ever sentence, you should ask yourself the following questions: Is it needed? Would the story lack without it? Am I providing new and/or crucial information?”

After reading the works listed below and many others, here are five ways to cut the number of words in your manuscript:

1. Be sure the reader enters the story at the time it’s essential to understand the plot, characters, or emotion. Not a minute too soon or too late. Sometimes backstory information was written down so that you, the author, could understand it better. This was good. However, this might be information the readers don’t need. Therefore, cut out the unnecessary backstory and put it in a folder so that you can resurrect it later, if you need it. If the reader doesn’t need to know it, cut it out.

2. Choose one word to replace phrases. Choose phrases to replace clauses.  Change prepositional phrases like teacher at Fairbanks School to Fairbanks School teacher to adjective noun. (Darcy Pattison and Joe Hight both mention this in their articles listed below.)

3. Cut the adverbs. Replace them with strong verbs. (There are at least 20 sources that tell authors to do this.)

4. Don’t interrupt dialogue too many times with unnecessary actions. Cut the facial expressions and body gestures, like grimacing her face, raising her eyebrows, lighting his cigarette.  Let the bigger actions speak for the characters. Make sure these actions are not ordinary. They are actions only a character like yours would do.  Let them move the plot, highlight the character, and/or add emotional tension. Dialogue that is interrupted too many times with unnecessary actions like these might make a reader put your book down forever. Highlight the words in your text that interrupt the dialogue.

5. Rewrite the dialogue so it can be understood without tags of he said, she said.

Here are resources that I found helpful in researching this topic:

1. Darcy Pattison, “Stop! Cut Picture Book Mss by 1/3.” http://www.darcypattison.com/picture-books/cut-picture-book-mss/

2. Joe Hight, Free Books Online, Mastering Communication:  “Too Many Words Can Muddle Writing,” http://free-books-online.org/mastering_communication/the-newspaper-handbook/too-many-words-can-muddle-writing/

3.  James Vektor, Hub Pages: Screenplay Length: “3 Ways to Cut Your Final Draft Down to Size,” http://hubpages.com/hub/Script-Format-Script-Length-That-Sells/. It has a good video interview with Screenwriter Paul Haggis who was the first screenwriter to write two Best Film Oscar winners back-to-back in 2006.

4. Renni Browne and Dave King: Self-Editing for Fiction Writers: How to Edit Yourself into Print, Harper Collins, 1993.

If you need to cut your manuscript words down to the quality every word counts, use these five ways to eliminate unnecessary words.

I hope  reading my blog inspires you to Never Give Up on your writing.

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Joan Y. Edwards

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